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Friday, 8 March 2013

Jaya swimming day

I felt so scared was I going to make it ever? No, disappointment stuck me I felt soo stuck up, I had come........second I guess that was ok but I thought I could do that tiny bit better I bobbed up to the surface the swarming noise of the surface world stabbed me in the back, sheesh!!!!


2 comments:

  1. You have used some really descriptive phrases in this text Jaya, well done.

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  2. Wow Jaya I love the ending of your memory about your swimming race - you have really carefully selected interesting words that make your writing exciting to read.

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