The amazing flying fox By taliya
Ahh! I screamed as I went down the flying fox. Whee! I said as I slowly went back up .When I got down and the harness was taken off of me. What we had to do was when some one got off the flying fox they would have to take it up all the way to the next person. You would take the helmet, pulley and the harness. Lots of peoples knees were shaking and there faces were red. I didn't feel that at all, in fact I was the best one there because I was the first one to go down the flying fox . Then we had lunch it was delicious mmmm!! We had a sausage sizzle . When we went on again it looked higher. My face went red like a tomato nooo!!!
I really like how you have begun to use similes and show not tell in your writing Taliya. I can see how the different people in the story were feeling. What a lot of fun we had on camp!
ReplyDeleteLauren